FYI - Writing goals
FYI - EDITING COLOUR KEY
FYI - YEAR 6 WRITING GOAL LESSON IS LINKED TO: … students will be using consistent tense throughout their texts to make their writing more cohesive.
ZARA & SOPHIA DISCUSSING SOPHIAS WORK (Time - 0:08 - 3:45)
Fantastic language, I am so happy students are referring back to our shared learning goals by saying ‘it would be more cohesive’ ‘add figurative language how was she etc.
Students really took this task seriously, I feel the feedback was valuable and they listened to the importance of justification and helping your peer correct/enhance there writing, going beyond just identifying the errors in the writing collaboratively discussing ways in which to fix it.
Students effectively used the colour grid we had discussed, this seemed to help them explain why they highlighted the error as there was a day between highlighting to when they actually had their conferencing session.
Sophia was very open and accepting of feedback
ZARA & SOPHIA DISCUSSING SOPHIAS ZARAS WORK (Time - 3:46 - 7:26)
Sophia offered suggestions not just stating what was wrong
Zara asking for suggestions, looking for her peers' opinion to enhance her work.
Sophia referred to herself during the editing to comfort Zara in her mistake LOVE THAT!
I love the shock on their faces when they made silly mistakes e.g spelling the protagonist's name differently in the text
Sophia: “I may have missed some of the similies in this but I think you could use one here” LOVE THIS DIALOGUE
Focus on more than just figurative devices/description.
SOPHIA & I CONFERENCING (Time - 7:30 - 17:27)
I like how she referred and remember the conferencing she had with Zara
Enjoyed referring back to the figurative writing display
Given Sophia more time to think of her own title, I think I could have helped her more rather than give her an answer
Could identify the moral
We discussed using alliteration in the title but didn't use it!
Could justify all the highlights showing that she had effective peer conferencing
Let Sophia type onto the device to fix the edits
Opportunity to assess students knowledge of our editing skills and figurative devices e.g do they understand cohesion? Whats an allusion.
Student vocabulary is great!
Attitude towards feedback is amazing. You have clearly spent a lot of time building positive attitudes around receiving feedback and using positive language to give feedback.
Love the use of colour coding.
Students are very good at descriptive language.
Students are on task the whole time and really learning.
Rubric terminology to be comfortable to speak about the feedback Sophia is trying to provide.
Goal setting: student can use this goal as a focal point for feedback, rather than speaking on all topics
Ensuring the feedback is correct by linking it to the rubric with a direct focus on the goal.
Figurative language key - more than a simile
Differentiation is occurring as the students are specifically targeting their personal learning goals.
Having modelled examples around the room so if students do have differences of opinions they are able to independently refer to an example.
Goal: Implementing the rubric to support student feedback by the next rise session.